OMM! This fic is interesting, not to mention funny! Haha, I really liked: He raised his eyebrows and smiled one of those sweet, girl I’m gonna make your panties wet, kinda smiles.ROFL!!!! Good going, can't wait to read more:happy: L.O.V.E. xXVx |
Love it, update soon :yes: |
I like this already! Please update soon |
I like it!! |
Hi!!! I found it intriguing.... :yes: |
I really like this! Please post more! :yes: |
WHOOoooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooo!!!!!! !!!! Very good! VERY VERY GOOD!!! U've got a good thing going here hun! Please continue! I can't wait to read more!!!! L.O.V.E. xXVx |
Totally loving it. I love present day Michael and I think you capture him well. Love the heroine so far. |
Hi!!! I like that she could 'spill' herself to him the way she did about her 'profession' and he didn't change his impression of her. He seems to be a real sweetheart in this story. I also thought it was cute how he wanted her number, in spite of everything she told him. She's different and I think he can see that. I hope that she now knows that she's better than the path she's chosen and get out from under that pimp's thumb. |
Hahahahahahahahaha!!!! Loving this so much!!! It's good to know Michael doesn't just want to use Ava. She's a sweet girl:happy: *sigh* Awww the love!:cupidwub: Keep going hun! Can't wait to read the next chapter!! L.O.V.E. xXVx |
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That was good for me to know, too. He 'is' a man. He's 'obviously' attracted to her. It's been a while for him and he 'knows' that she's sort of like an out-of-place prostitute which could have made it easy for him to take advantage of her if he wanted to. However, he didn't and that makes his character likeable in my book. Now what was the *disclaimer* before your chapter about? I want to know more about those nightmares and the man (men) in them... Joseph maybe??? :dontknow: He spoke about people thinking he was 'washed up' and this is set in the present time so maybe not Joseph... IDK... Good update~ :happy: |
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Hi! Thanks for your reply :) Asking about the disclaimer was more or less my way of saying that the subject matter was just fine with me. I didn't find your depiction of it distasteful at all. After all, it is what it is - right? And all that it 'wasn't' is just a figment of the writer's imagination (fiction), but I completely understand. I am currently working on something that ppl instantly perceive as a 'dark' subject until they read a little bit further - if they ever do... :lol2: So trust me, I understand. I also understand that some things are revealed 'in time'. :wink: I will continue to follow it to see how everything unfolds... Thanks again for taking the time to answer me... :happy: |
I love how... gritty this story is. You don't sugarcoat anything, and I love it. I feel like they can help each other. Michael can help her redeem her moral values, and she can give him more self-esteem, or help get him off the pills. This isn't a typical "fan goes to Neverland, MJ thinks she's perfect, they get married the next day" story, and I really like it. :) |
W.O.W.!!!!!! This was so interesting! I got Hooked! Hun, I'm glad u chose this chapter to explain all of this. It totally makes the story clearer and better to understand, specially now that they're good friends. And OMM! Haha, Michael making dirty jokes is such a turn on! I can just imagine the kind of things he'd say! *drifts off into naughty thoughts* Oh hun! U must include MJ making a dirty joke in the next chapter! PLEASE!!!! Conitnue with this hun, u know it's great! L.O.V.E. xXVx |
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Love ya hun! L.O.V.E. xXVx |
OH YEAH!! We're almost to the good stuff! ROFL!!! Aww, thnks hun!:happy: I totally can't wait to read what dirty joke MJ will make. I hope it's not too dirty or he'll make me faint! (out of laughter and hotness of course:hoplol:) Yeah, so glad I'll be the first to recieve it! I'm totally gonna give a BBBBBBBIIIIIIIIIGGGGGGGG, LLLLLOOOOOONNNNNNNGGGGGGGG REVIEW! Ok hun, I'll be patiently waiting for it! Thnk u and sweet dreams! Dream with our Lovely MJ!:wub: L.O.V.E. xXVx |
NEW READER ALERT! I just starting reading this story, and it is AMAAZINGLY AWESOME. C= I love reading about older Mike, and you've captured him perfectly. Subscribe buttom = Click! Can't wait for next update, xx Samantha xx |
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Hay girl haaay ! Naaaww, your welcome C= Older Mike = Sexy as hell :) Awwh that's great, yes please - i wouldn't mind a pm and such! Can't wait for next chapter, All my love - Samantha xxxxx P.S. I have accepted your friend request (L) |
New Reader here. I LOVE this! It's great seeing Michael more mature and your writing style is great, definitely drew me in. Keep up the great work:D Can't wait for your next update:yes: |
AH!!!!!U know I want that PM girl!!!! Thnk u for the update and hell yeah! Michael, c'mon boy, give us another one of ur dirty jokes! *sits on floor with legs crossed, big eager eyes glowing, waiting for Mike to talk*:cute: SAY IT! SAY IT! SAY IT! Hhhmmmm, so Javon doesn't like her, eh? Ppff! He's just jealous he can't get any! Specially something as good as her! Lol! *sigh* I just adore how the alcohol can loosen u up *takes a sip of a Corona* No wait, u weren't suppose to know that! :eek3: Oh hun, I don't think she's the only one with the tingling feeling in-between her legs,:yeahbaby: Hehe, exited much? I gotta clam down before I........*oh crud*..........:thud: Hun! Please! The PM! It's what I need! L.O.V.E. xXVx |
Wow, I love this so far, you've made the characters so realistic. I hope Javon warms up to her. Can you PM me too please? I can't wait to read more, You're a great writer:D |
Hi Nicki... I was behind a chapter, but I've caught up with the story again. Your descriptions of the hotel were 'perfect' to say the least. I've never seen it, but I feel like I was there... In case I haven't said, I am enjoying their easy camaraderie. They have built a rapport over a month's time that I can truthfully say I like. Although he probably could have (considering her 'profession'), he hasn't jumped her bones - yet and that's nice also. It depicts him as grown and sexy with morals. Will you please send me the pm? I will update my post with additional comments once I am done. P.S. Do not give up on your fic. As was said earlier, you have some followers who will read and never post a comment, but try not to take it to heart. Write and post for you first. You will find it cathartic and the viewers will follow... I, personally, am hanging in to see where you take this... |
I just started reading this today! This is pretty cool, I'd like to see where this goes! Oh, and I like to be pm'd too. :slem: |
Myyy wordddd.... The detail that you give to their, :uhm:, intimate act is mind-boggling... To leave a comment of 'hot' would do this piece a serious injustice. Michael was a freak-nasty sex god, but immensely attentive to his lover's needs. It was clear that his aim was to please her. I enjoyed taking in every 'drop' of this chapter from his dirty joke to the dirty deed. :yes: :slem: :yay: Great descriptive writing! You have a captive audience in me... Waiting for the next installment~ :whistle: |
I am liking this story so much. I like the way they interact together. I can't wait to read about ther dirty joke he tells her!! There is just something about MJ telling a dirty joke. Oh yes please send me the PM. |
Hi,new reader here:wave:I just love this story,you're a very good writter!!!!I'm in love with the more mature Michael with his dirty jokes,his sence of humor,his insecurities and all.Your description of him is very nice and i have the feeling that he was like that in real life.I can't wait to see what happens next,will you send me the pm chapter please???? Thank you in advance |
hii,new reader! :) i love the story Can i get a PM,please?? :blush: Amazing,girl! Thanks 4 the PM!! :) |
Wow . That was HOT!!! I am loving mature Michael in this one so much. Amazing job on the PM. |
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I'm glad I could share something helpful and you're also right about sharing your first story. I feel all of the emotions that you are feeling right now, but rest assured that there is an audience for 'all types' of stories. You just have to keep writing until you find your audience... I am impressed with what I see so far and I will continue to follow this fic~ Good job! |
Hey sexyeyes, nice chapter!! I had heard about the Bellagio in passing before but you described it so well, it's almost like I visited it :hoplol: I love how close these two are becoming. I am glad that she did not go down that route thus Michael being her saviour. LOL @ the dirty jokes. She's about to unleash the beast. Girl, I hope you ready for there will be no backing out now :bleh: Could I please get the PM chapter? Thanks! |
WOW that was awesome,wonderful,hot,hot,hot :heat::heat::heat:I love the way he looks at her,the dirty talking,my goodness he's sexy as hell....ooooff I need a cold shower ASAP:thud: can't wait for more:bow::bow::bow: |
new reader here this story is fab could i please get the pm. Lordy lord that was sooo Hot!! thanks for the pm x |
May I get the PM as well please?? Thanks in advance! |
Can you PM me too....thanks! |
WOW!!!! That PM was.... damn!!!! He put it DOWWWNNNN!!!!!! Ava is a lucky woman! Get it Mike!!! They're cute. Good PM. |
sexyeyes, thanks for the PM! Michael and his potty mouth, how sexy is that? That scene was just unbelievably HOT. Look at cocky MJ making an appearance with the "blessed" statement. But he can be cocky though cause he knows he got it like that! :bleh: I knew Ava would get more than she bargained for. The insatiable beast is gonna eat her alive (no pun intended :hoplol:). I am loving where this is heading. Can't wait for the next updates! |
Hey Nicki, I am really enjoying Michael and Eva. I really like the older more mature Michael. You have me hooked. Can you please PM me thanks, Dawn Nicki, Wow, that was really hot....probably one of the hottest sex scenes that I have read yet....Now I have to wait for my husband to get home...Dawn |
HUN! That was too hot!!!! U r so talented and OMM!!! U know ur stuff!!! *tales deep breaths* Oh sh!t, I gotta calm down. Gotta get these goosebumps off of me and damn! Don't think I'm nasty or anything (well, yeah I am) but I am...................uhm...................geez... .....................uhm..................... What's that verb called again? When a liquid touches an object? It gets......uhm......what?.......Ah! Wet! That's it! ROFL!!!! I'm so sorry for reading it 'til now but I was so busy. Please forgive me hun but know for sure that I appreciate being the first to have received it! Damn! I can't get over it!!! LOVE u so much hun and I gotta go to the bathroom now, LMFAO!! Love u lots! L.O.V.E. xXVx |
YAY thanks for the PM, that was definitely very HOT! It was interesting to see from Michaels POV too. Haha love how red wine can break down a lot if nervous barriers. I love this story so far, cannot wait fo your next update!.....and thats a rhyme:D Awesome stuff!!!! |
heya i'm a new reader. :) whoa, this story is awesome! and seems pretty steamy. from other peoples reaction is making me curious about the pm chapter. lol. can i have the pm plz? |
hey new reader here :yes: im in love with this story :yes: can you pm me please thank you :blush2: |
Hun! I'm glad u didn't change it! It would been a disaster, like a mega disaster, sort of like a 9/11, Mount Vesusius, Great Chicago Fire, disaster! (if not to mention more, if u want I'll keep going.....................:whistle:) Totally happy about the dirty jokes part too! I loved 'em! Now, whenever I tell them to anyone else, I'll totally have u and MJ in mind:laugh: Oh yeah! Girl, it'll make my day to be the first to know an update is up! :dance::woop: I can imagine MJ saying this: One morning a woman was walking out of her front door, when she notices a strange little man at the bottom of her garden. "You're a goblin," she says, "I caught you and you owe me three wishes!". So the goblin replies "OK, you caught me fair and square, what's your first wish?". The woman stops and thinks for a second, "I want a huge mansion to live in.", goblins replies "OK, you've got it.". Woman again thinks it over, "My second wish is a Mercedes." "OK, you've got that too." "My last wish is a million dollars!". The goblin then says "OK, you've got it. But to make your wishes come true you have to have sex all night with me." "OK then, if that's what it takes..." Next morning the little man wakes the woman up. "Tell me," says the man, "how old are you?" "I'm 27", she replies "**** me", says the man, "27 and you still believe in goblins" Lova ya hun! L.O.V.E. xXVx |
:woop: *runs off to learn dirty jokes*:highspeed: Thnk u hun!:give_flowers: Oh yeah, u guys totally left an impression on me! Oh oh! I taped my reaction after reading ur PM! Here it is: :rescue: I know, it's sad:aw: But damn! Michael! :open: OOOH! See how he opens his legs?! How the hell are we suppose to resist that?! *shakes head* Michael should be locked up for corrupting the nature of sexyness.:chained: :imbad: OH yeah u are! C'mere! I'mma settle u down...........................:drool: Events: We drink:beer::beer: We have a few laughs:chatting: We cuddle:huggle: and........ *We're sorry to inform u that the rest of this comment has been deleted for ilegal use of adulterated MJ content* *breaths heavily* Ok hun, I'm back, just gave Mikey a lesson. Anyways, see how bad he affects the nature of sexyness? I'm telling u hun he's a bad influence and we just boost his ego with allthese xxx PM's we write (not that we can stop either) but we must draw a line!:stop: Michael is way out of control! I think u should teach him a lesson hun:wink2ni3::glaugh:Go ahead! Tell him some dirty jokes!:toofunny: or anything else u desire,lol! Don't worry hun, u take ur time with the comment. :victory: :thriller: *random* Love ya lots! L.O.V.E. xXVx |
oh hell the pm update was WHOA!!!!!!!!!! SUPER STEAMY! i'm glad i've caught this story. lol. loved it!! :D can't wait for more. |
I have no words to say. *sighs* OK, now I do. Hun, literally, this chapter had me speechless for 5 minutes. 5 whole minutes!!! I tried to get something to scream out but there were so many words in my mouth that were wrestling to come out first, so many words were squeezed in there that there was no room for the slightest letter to pop out. *sighs* HOW THE HELL COULD MICHAEL DO THAT??!!!!! I'm pissed. Yep, I said it! I'm F*cking Pissed!!! He's got to be kidding! He totally nails her through out the entire night and he can't even explain or at least answer her simple question?!! And now he says he's got a plane to catch to L.A.? After that night he easily says he's got a plane to catch to L.A.?!!! Some nerve! Some f*cking nerve!!! Geez!!! Poor Ava. Damn, she should do something......................................... ....she should do something BAD! Mmmmmmmmm, more like bad towards him. Or at least cry. Damn! She should first go home and cry! Yeah, she should at least go home and cry. *sighs again* Sorry Michael, not even ur dirty jokes can make me forgive u now. U've gotta try harder. And not with us the readers, but with Ava! And u better do it right boy! Nicki, ur right,this chapter did sturr my emotions. Like I said, 5 minutes being speechless. Now, it takes something big to get a reaction like that out of me. Hun, loved it! L.O.V.E.D. IT! L.O.V.E.D. IT!!!! Please keep going and I know it's too soon, way too soon to ask for another update but damn! I can't help it! I want another! Love u lots hun!:wub: L.O.V.E. xXVx |
WO, Michael...stuffed up...BAD! not sure how he'll dig his way out of that one...golly, not very smooth dun dun dun. Once again, great update, I eagerly await more:D |
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*suspense music* I love u more hun! :hoplol: Take care! L.O.V.E. xXVx |
How could he do that?? I'm so pissed :( That chapter was amazing girl! waiting for more :) |
aww thats messed up. he didnt have to treat her that way. thats so wrong! >:( great update! |
I'm so behind! Can you please send me the PMs? I would really, really appreciate it! Thanks! |
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This chapter stirred my emotions - negatively at first... Later, I was just :( They seemed to have so much chemistry at first. Now, I almost wished she hadn't 'jumped' with him. Sometimes, men change after they get the goodies. However, I don't see that being his problem. I think he didn't know how to deal with her knowing his 'secret'. Still, not the proper way to handle things... considering~ |
SMDH!!!! She shoulda slapped the sh*t outta him before she left!!! How dare he treat her like that after the night they had??!!! He has f*cked up ROYALLY!!! He's gonna have all the making up in the world to do.. Ava didn't deserve to be treated like that. Straight assh*ole for that one.. SMDH. |
Can I please have the PMed chapter?? I just caught up to that part and don't want to continue until I get to read it. Love the story so far!!! |
Great update loved it x |
That PM was hot and very realistic. I felt like I was having deja vu when I read it because it made me think of me and my man when we first got together. Good job!!!!!!!!!! And the following update was good. Short and to the point and makes us all angry, sad and desperate to know what happens next. lol |
Picking the bottles up one by one I read the labels: Vicodin, Fentanyl, Oxycontin, Demerol, Valium, Xanax, Midazolam, Diazepam, Versed, Lorazepam, Alprazolam, Lidocaine, Ritalin, Dexedrine, Ambien.... hell I haven’t even heard of half of these names. Wow, simply with your laundry list you were able to remind me of the real-life struggles that Michael dealt with every day. As much as I hate him for how he treated Ava, I do understand that he must feel ashamed after she saw it all. I can't believe Michael treated her like a $2 ho. He has lots of apologizing to do. I want them to get back together so badly! I can't handle the suspense anymore! |
Great update. I am glad Michael is feeling remorse for the way he treated her. As he should. I only hope he can convince her how sorry he is for it. Looking forward to the next chapter.:wub: |
I'm happy he realized how bad he acted towards her! I hope he can convince her :) Can't wait to read the next chapter!! |
phew glad to see Michael's POV but i think he still will have some grovelling to do. Hope she hears him out. Great stuff! Can't wait for your next update:yes: |
I knew deep down inside his behavior was due to shame and embarrassment. But that doesn't make what he said and did okay. Well, now that he realized what he did wrong, he has to go chase her! Get her back, MJ, get her back! |
Ha-ha-ha...................About time Michael! ¨*clams down* Poor guy I guess. He's just had it rough. But still, I can' help but feel mad when a man acts disrespectful towards a woman:blush2: So I won't be happy until he does makes ammends with Ava. He better *narrows eyes*:homer: U better Michael or I'll go all THRILLER on u!!!!:thriller: Great chapter once again hun! Thnx for the notfication and I'll be waiting for more! P.S. Michael! U better make things right boy! U don't want me to teach u a lesson again, do u?:wink2ni3::whistle: L.O.V.E. xXVx |
Remorse! HA!. Thats what i'm talking about. he got some major making up to do. GET HER BACK MIKE! kool update :D |
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:heha: Nice chapter, girl~ I am loving your storytelling and I'm checkin' for the next update~ :wink: |
Awww, i think Ava really needs to talk with Mike. the poem was beyond sweet. :D. Cant wait for the next chapter! |
Great Update and the poem was really sweet. I look forward to seeing how michael acts when he sees her in person. hope she forgives him. Can't wait for more:fedora: |
Awww,that was so sweet!! She needs to talk to him,pronto! |
Hun! U got me giggling and smiling like a school girl with a crush!!!! How do u do that?!! That was very sweet and OK! I forgive Michael now! I hope Ava does too. Their love is meant to be! U can tell Michael is truly sorry and sending all those flowers is just AMAZING! Oh hun, I absolutely love long chapters so I had a blast reading this one! Hun ur so talented, please continue! I can't wait to read more and oh do notify me A.S.A.P.!! :dance: *10 STARS* L.O.V.E. xXVx |
Hi! :wave: This was a lovely :wub: chapter. Ava was right not to answer the telephone. A girl can't be 'too' desperate. Also, it helped to drive the point home to him that he was a pr*ck to her and look at the result! She showed him that the deed may have been done, but she wasn't an easy win. Poor Mike. :aw: The pills. Zoloft is actually quite common - an antidepressant, right? So that's not so bad. He's in such a state that the need for those is completely understandable. I just don't like the fact that he feels the need to 'hide' them. I understand privacy, but hidden compartments combined with the plethora of stuff we already know about spells a.d.d.i.c.t.i.o.n., but at any rate, I highly anticipate his explanation of the pills... Which leads me to my 'next' point: Liz is a beautiful soul in all the fics she appears in. Love her. The 'whupping' she gave Michael? well deserved. The advice she gave him? priceless. The flowers were a marvelous idea. In combination with the multiple messages he left for her, she was able to see his heart toward her. Filling the room with all the flowers in stock?? The poem??? OMG! Lovely. :wub::wub2: The detail in this chapter right down to the letterhead on the attachment? Kudos to the writer. Great job! Lucas??? :ph34r: Why do I feel like he's not going to let Ava just 'walk away'? Her cousin??? There was a reason for the backstory I know so I won't be surprised when she breaks bad on somebody about Ava! :laughehe: I 'so' hope Ava gets in touch... No, let's go one better. Let Michael go see his kiddies and fly back out to see her in person! He's the King of Pop so he can do that, right? :wink: Nice update~ |
awwwwh, that update was cute beyond words! (: Michael really is sorry, huh? She should really hear him out. Loving this story as always, you never disappoint, chica xx |
Don't apologize for long chapters, girl! I absolutely loved it! The poem was so great. I loved how you made it "authentic" with grammar, spelling, font, and the header even though it's on Word. Great job! I hope she picks up when he calls! |
Great update love this story x |
Hi! :wave: Their talk was sooooo tender that it almost hurt. :wub::wub2: Loved that she wasn't afraid to push the envelope and go there with him, but it hurt just the same to hear the way he stuttered and stammered through every answer. Why did I feel that, while he was being honest, he wasn't being completely honest??? It was something about the 'hoarding' that made sense (as though this was the answer he'd rehearsed) but I just didn't completely buy it. At any rate, I think they're sweet together. He's sweet to worry about whether or not he hurt her and she's sweet for blushing and carrying on while trying to explain that he didn't. I really do like this story. Great job of filling in the blanks in her mind (and ours) thus far. Great chapter... Yours is one of the stories that I look forward to reading each time~ :happy: Kathy |
Yaaaaaays :hoplol: they made up! Wow, really tore me up when i was reading their phone call convo - nearly got me crying and crap.. girl, you play'n with my emotions now? :wink: Michael is such a romantic in this, and so well real-like too with all his flaws, (the pills) I imagine he would have had a few pills in his life with the hell he's gone through and i don't blame him - he's a hero for getting through the trial tbh, i couldn't do it. He's some sort of amazing ain't he? :wub: Somehow, every flaw i know of his - i seem to turn around to make something sexy :hoplol: LMAO, don't ask me how.. but i do. hahahaha. Always love your updates, chica <3 Sammy |
That was an amazing chapter,girl!! Their conversation was so sweet :) I hope things go well from now on |
I think only: *sniff, sniff* can explain my reaction! Girl, this was GREAT! Very touching, very touching indeed! So, Michael still on Zoloft, eh? It's true, depression is very hard to deal with, hell, it can be deadly. It's sad. Though, I'm glad he was able to talk to Ava about it. I'm relieved and glad to know they're gonna start over. Oh, I totally know what Ava meant with the whole wondering if she should answer his call and then it stoppped ringing! It's a very butterfly in stomach, nervous feeling. But then, HE CALLED AGAIN! I smiled at that!:dance: I also wonder what's gonna go on next, hhhmmmm.................. Hun, please keep it up and u know I'll want any PM coming up! I want to sign onto the list! *takes clipboard and pen* *clicks pen* *looks at the list and signs name* http://i431.photobucket.com/albums/q...SIGNATURE2.jpg Looks around at people, "Who's next?" L.O.V.E. xXVx |
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Awwwwh, i'm sorry. Your friend is in a better place now, looking over you (: Nevermind about the update, take some time for yourself, chica. I hope you're doing okay, I love you to infinity & beyond hun xxxxxxxx |
Oh my God, this was so candid, so intense. And it felt real. I loved it. I think you really captured the pain Michael was in his later years, and I hope you continue to make this story so realistic. Thanks for the update. And also, I am so, so sorry about your friend. There is no reason to apologize for not having a new chapter! Take some time to yourself. I'mma pray for you and your friend. |
Hun, I'm so sorry about ur friend. Please accept my sincerest condolences hun. I'm here for u. If u need to talk, u know I'll be here to listen. I send u my best wishes to overcome this tragic loss and please take care sweetie. U know I love u:wub: I send u even more MJ love as well as my love, hugs and kisses. Love u hun:happy: L.O.V.E. xXVx |
:aw: I'm really sorry to hear that... Just wanted to you know that I (we) am (are) here waiting for you whenever you feel up to returning. Peace to you and to your friends family~ Kathy |
Hey, I'm a new reader, I'm still reading, but can you please PM me the PM parts?..Also, this story is great :wink:. |
